Analysing language, structure and effect
By the end of this chapter you will be able to
- Separate the literal meaning of a word from its connotation
- Name a device, and explain what it makes the reader picture or feel
- Identify sentence types and lengths, and explain the effect of a short or a rhetorical sentence
- Identify viewpoint and person, and explain how structure moves the reader
- Judge the tone of a text, and evaluate the effect of a writer's choices with reasons
You should already know
- Figurative language: simile, metaphor and personification (Year 6, Chapter 11)
- Sentence types: statement, question, command, exclamation (Year 2 and Year 6 grammar)
Where this leads
- Reading poetry: form, imagery and sound (Chapter 3 of this book)
- Reading non-fiction: fact, opinion, bias and summary (Chapter 5 of this book)
National Curriculum for England, Key Stage 3 English, Year 7. Content: Analyse how word choice, sentence length, imagery, structure, viewpoint and tone contribute to meaning and effect (KS3 reading, R3), Explain the connotations of words, and the effect of a writer's choices on the reader (KS3 reading, R3), Evaluate the effect of a writer's choices, and judge how well they work (KS3 reading, R4).
Exercise P Do you remember?
Method. An adverb tells us how, when or where something happens.
- Find the verb. Ran is the action.ran
- Find the word that tells how. Quickly tells us how she ran.quickly
- Name the word class. Words that tell how are adverbs.adverb
- Write the answer. adverb
Check. quickly describes the verb, so it is an adverb. ✓
Method. A comparison with like or as is a simile.
- Look for like or as. A comparison with like or as is the mark of a simile.like or as
- Name the device. The device is a simile.simile
- Write the answer. simile
Check. like or as makes a simile. ✓
Method. A rhetorical question is a question asked for effect.
- Think about the purpose. The writer asks the question to make the reader think.make the reader think
- Think about the answer. The writer does not expect a real answer.no real answer
- Write the answer. A rhetorical question is asked to make the reader think, and it does not need an answer.
Check. The question is for effect. ✓
Method. A sentence that tells someone to do something is a command.
- Look at the first word. Close is a verb, given as an order.Close
- Name the type. An order is a command.command
- Write the answer. command
Check. It tells the reader to do something. ✓
Method. I is the first-person pronoun.
- Look at the pronoun. I refers to the speaker.I
- Name the person. Words that use I are first person.first person
- Write the answer. first person
Check. I is first person. ✓
Word choice: denotation and connotation
The denotation of a word is its literal, dictionary meaning. Its connotations are the ideas and feelings it suggests. Two words with the same denotation can have very different connotations: thin and skeletal both describe a body that is not fat, but skeletal suggests illness or danger.
Text 1: The night market (original, descriptive)
1The night market began when the last shutters rattled up on Canal Street. Within minutes, the pavement had become a river of colour: silk scarves the shade of plums, lanterns swinging like small moons, and tables stacked with peaches that glowed under the bulbs.
2Music drifted from somewhere behind the stalls. A man shouted prices, quick and cheerful. Steam rose from a pan of noodles, and the smell of cinnamon hung in the cold air. Everyone seemed to be moving at once, and nobody seemed to mind.
3Then the crowd thinned. The vendor at the end of the row lowered her awning and sat down. She watched the empty street for a long moment. The lanterns flickered and went out one by one, like tired eyes closing. Silence crept back onto the cobbles.
Key ideas
- Denotation is the literal meaning; connotation is the suggested meaning.
- A writer chooses a word for its connotations, not only its meaning.
- When you explain a word, say what it suggests and what effect it has on the reader.
Method. Separate the literal meaning from the suggestion.
- Literal meaning. Cheerful means happy and in good spirits.happy
- Suggested meaning. The seller seems friendly, which makes the reader want to stop.friendly
- Connotation. The word suggests a welcoming seller.friendly and welcoming
- Write the answer. friendly and welcoming
Check. The connotation is linked to the text. ✓
Method. Compare the two words.
- Literal meaning. Both words mean something is over or under something else.over or under
- Connotation of buried. Buried suggests the park is hidden and almost lost.hidden and almost lost
- Compare the effect. Covered would be milder; buried is stronger and more alarming.stronger and more alarming
- Write the answer. buried suggests the park is almost lost, which is stronger than covered
Check. The comparison explains the choice. ✓
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. Rushed means hurrying, which suggests speed and energy.rushed fits
- Reject the other choices. Drifted suggests slow, gentle movement, and waited suggests stillness.drifted and waited do not fit
- Write the answer. rushed
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Watch out
Watch out: a connotation is an idea the word suggests, not the word repeated. Do not say "buried means buried".
Exam tip
Exam tip. For word choice, write the word, its suggested meaning, and the effect on the reader, in that order.
Exercise 2A Practice: word choice and connotation
Method. Separate the literal meaning from the suggested meaning.
- Literal meaning. rattled means the basic meaning of the word.rattled
- Suggested meaning. The verb suggests a loud, busy start to the market.noise and effort, as the shop opens loudly
- Write the answer. noise and effort, as the shop opens loudly.
Check. The suggestion is linked to the phrase. ✓
Method. Separate the literal meaning from the suggested meaning.
- Literal meaning. cheerful means the basic meaning of the word.cheerful
- Suggested meaning. The seller seems pleasant, so the reader feels drawn in.friendly and welcoming
- Write the answer. friendly and welcoming.
Check. The suggestion is linked to the phrase. ✓
Method. Separate the literal meaning from the suggested meaning.
- Literal meaning. tired means the basic meaning of the word.tired
- Suggested meaning. Tired suggests the lanterns, and the market, are ending after a long day.exhausted, sleepy or worn out
- Write the answer. exhausted, sleepy or worn out.
Check. The suggestion is linked to the phrase. ✓
Method. Separate the literal meaning from the suggested meaning.
- Literal meaning. shameful means the basic meaning of the word.shameful
- Suggested meaning. The word suggests the problem is something to be ashamed of, which pushes the reader to act.disgraceful, something to feel guilty about
- Write the answer. disgraceful, something to feel guilty about.
Check. The suggestion is linked to the phrase. ✓
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. Rushed suggests hurry and energy.rushed fits
- Reject the other choices. Drifted and waited suggest slow movement or stillness.drifted and waited do not fit
- Write the answer. rushed
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Method. Search the text for the words the question asks for.
- Find the place in the text. Paragraph 3 describes the lanterns going out.flickered
- Copy the words exactly. Copy them with no changes.flickered
- Write the answer. flickered
Check. The words are copied exactly from the text. ✓
Method. Find the final sentence.
- Find the word. Silence crept back onto the cobbles, which is quiet and calm.Silence
- Copy it. The word is Silence.Silence
- Write the answer. Silence
Check. Silence suggests calm. ✓
Method. Separate the literal meaning from the suggested meaning.
- Literal meaning. carpet means the basic meaning of the word.carpet
- Suggested meaning. A carpet covers the whole path, so the rubbish seems to spread everywhere.a thick covering that spreads over everything, and looks unwanted
- Write the answer. a thick covering that spreads over everything, and looks unwanted.
Check. The suggestion is linked to the phrase. ✓
Method. Think about what overflow means.
- Literal meaning. Overflow means to spill over the top.spill over
- Suggested meaning. The bins seem too full and out of control.out of control
- Write the answer. it suggests the bins are too full and out of control.
Check. The suggested meaning is explained. ✓
Method. Find the verb about the bins.
- Find the verb. The bins overflow.overflow
- Write the answer. overflow
Check. The verb is copied exactly. ✓
Method. Think about what overflow suggests.
- Think about the suggestion. Overflow suggests too much, and no control.too much
- Write the answer. too full and out of control
Check. The connotation fits the word. ✓
Method. Compare the two words.
- Connotation of shameful. It suggests blame and guilt.blame and guilt
- Connotation of unfortunate. It suggests bad luck, with no blame.bad luck
- Write the answer. shameful suggests the problem is wrong and that readers should feel guilty, while unfortunate suggests bad luck.
Check. The difference is explained. ✓
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. At once suggests speed and everyone acting together.moving at once fits
- Reject the other choices. Slowly suggests the opposite, so it does not fit the busy market.moving slowly do not fit
- Write the answer. moving at once
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Method. Explain each word, then say what the pair does together.
- Explain shameful. It suggests guilt.guilt
- Explain ours. It suggests the problem belongs to the reader too.belongs to the reader
- Combine them. Together they make the reader feel guilty and responsible.guilty and responsible
- Write the answer. shameful suggests guilt, and ours suggests shared responsibility, so the reader feels both guilty and involved.
Check. Both words are explained and combined. ✓
Imagery: simile, metaphor and personification
Imagery is language that creates a picture in the reader's mind. A simile compares two things using like or as. A metaphor says one thing is another, without like or as. Personification gives human feelings or actions to something that is not human.
Key ideas
- A simile uses like or as: the lanterns swing like small moons.
- A metaphor says one thing is another: a river of colour.
- Personification gives a human action to a thing: silence crept.
Method. Look for like or as, then decide whether one thing is called another.
- Check for like or as. There is no like or as in the phrase.no like or as
- Check for one thing being another. The pavement is said to be a river.the pavement is a river
- Name the device. Saying one thing is another is a metaphor.metaphor
- Write the answer. metaphor
Check. The phrase says the pavement is a river. ✓
Method. Name the device, then say what the picture adds.
- Name the device. Like small moons is a simile.simile
- Picture the comparison. The lanterns are round and glowing, like moons.round and glowing
- Explain the effect. The image makes the market seem magical.magical
- Write the answer. the lanterns look round, bright and magical
Check. The simile creates a bright, magical picture. ✓
Method. Look for a human action given to a thing.
- Find the action. Silence crept, which is a human movement.crept
- Name the device. Giving a non-human thing a human action is personification.personification
- Explain the effect. Silence seems to return slowly and quietly.slowly and quietly
- Write the answer. personification: silence is given a slow, human action
Check. Silence is given a human action. ✓
Watch out
Watch out: a simile needs like or as. "The lanterns were like moons" is a simile; "the lanterns were moons" is a metaphor.
Exam tip
Exam tip. Name the device, quote it, then explain what it makes the reader picture or feel.
Exercise 2B Practice: imagery and effect
Method. Look at the words, then decide what kind of device they are.
- Find the device. The pavement is called a river, without like or as.a river of colour
- Name it. The device is metaphor.metaphor
- Write the answer. metaphor
Check. The device is named correctly. ✓
Method. Look at the words, then decide what kind of device they are.
- Find the device. The lanterns are compared to moons, using like.lanterns swinging like small moons
- Name it. The device is simile.simile
- Write the answer. simile
Check. The device is named correctly. ✓
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. Silence is given the human action of creeping.personification fits
- Reject the other choices. A simile would need like or as, and silence is not compared to another thing.simile and metaphor do not fit
- Write the answer. personification
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Method. Name the choice, then say what it makes the reader feel or picture.
- Find the choice. The writer chooses these words.peaches that glowed
- Explain the effect. The glow makes the fruit look tempting and warm.the fruit looks warm, bright and inviting
- Write the answer. the fruit looks warm, bright and inviting.
Check. The effect is linked to the words. ✓
Method. Look at the words, then decide what kind of device they are.
- Find the device. The lanterns are compared to eyes, using like.like tired eyes closing
- Name it. The device is simile.simile
- Write the answer. simile
Check. The device is named correctly. ✓
Method. Name the choice, then say what it makes the reader feel or picture.
- Find the choice. The writer chooses these words.like tired eyes closing
- Explain the effect. The image makes the ending gentle and tired.the lights fade slowly, so the market seems to be going to sleep
- Write the answer. the lights fade slowly, so the market seems to be going to sleep.
Check. The effect is linked to the words. ✓
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. There is no comparison with like or as.no fits
- Reject the other choices. A simile would need a comparison; the sentence states what the crowd does.yes do not fit
- Write the answer. no
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Method. Look at the words, then decide what kind of device they are.
- Find the device. The path is called a carpet, without like or as.a carpet of crisp packets
- Name it. The device is metaphor.metaphor
- Write the answer. metaphor
Check. The device is named correctly. ✓
Method. Name the choice, then say what it makes the reader feel or picture.
- Find the choice. The writer chooses these words.buried under rubbish
- Explain the effect. Buried suggests the park is hidden and in danger.the park seems almost lost, so the reader feels concern
- Write the answer. the park seems almost lost, so the reader feels concern.
Check. The effect is linked to the words. ✓
Method. Name the choice, then say what it makes the reader feel or picture.
- Find the choice. The writer chooses these words.Think of the ducks that choke on plastic
- Explain the effect. It asks the reader to imagine a real animal in pain.the reader pictures real harm to animals and feels guilty
- Write the answer. the reader pictures real harm to animals and feels guilty.
Check. The effect is linked to the words. ✓
Method. Choose one image, then explain what the picture adds.
- Choose the image. A river of colour is a strong image.a river of colour
- Give the reason. It makes the whole street seem to flow with colour.to flow with colour
- Write the answer. the river of colour, because a whole street becomes a flowing mass of brightness.
Check. The choice is explained with a reason. ✓
Method. Look for like or as.
- Look for like. The phrase has like, which makes a comparison.like
- Name the device. A comparison with like is a simile.simile
- Write the answer. simile
Check. like makes a simile. ✓
Method. Think about what each device does.
- Choose a device. Personification gives human feelings.human feelings
- Explain the reason. A tired street shows the dullness in a lively way.a lively way
- Write the answer. a personification, because it gives the street a human feeling, such as weariness.
Check. The choice is explained. ✓
Sentence structure, length and effect
Writers choose sentence types: a statement tells, a question asks, a command orders, and an exclamation shows strong feeling. They also vary the length. A short sentence creates emphasis or a pause. A list of three builds up a picture. A rhetorical question is asked for effect, so the reader thinks about the answer.
Text 2: Our park (original, persuasive)
1Every Friday, the park bins overflow, and the paths become a carpet of crisp packets and drink cans. Who decided that this was acceptable?
2We pay our taxes, we love our green spaces, and yet we allow them to be buried under rubbish. Think of the ducks that choke on plastic, the children who play near broken glass, and the grandparents who no longer sit on the benches.
3This is not a small problem. It is a shameful one, and it is ours to fix.
4Pick up one item today. Then ask a neighbour to do the same. Together, we can give our park back.
Key ideas
- A short sentence creates emphasis and pace.
- A list of three builds up a picture or an argument.
- A rhetorical question makes the reader think, without needing an answer.
Method. Name the sentence type, then say what it does.
- Name the type. It is a question, but no answer is needed.question
- Explain the purpose. The writer makes the reader think about who is to blame.who is to blame
- Explain the effect. The reader feels challenged and may feel responsible.feels challenged
- Write the answer. it makes the reader think and feel challenged
Check. The question is rhetorical. ✓
Method. Look at the length and the position of the sentence.
- Look at the length. It has only six words, after longer sentences.six words
- Look at the position. It comes after a question, so it sharpens the point.sharpens the point
- Explain the effect. The reader is given a firm, serious statement.firm, serious statement
- Write the answer. it creates emphasis and makes the problem seem serious
Check. The short sentence is emphatic. ✓
Method. Count the items, then consider how they build.
- Count the items. Ducks, children and grandparents: three groups.three groups
- Look at the build. Each group is harmed in a different way.in a different way
- Explain the effect. The list builds up a feeling of widespread harm.widespread harm
- Write the answer. it builds up a sense of harm, so the reader pictures many victims
Check. The list of three builds up the picture. ✓
Watch out
Watch out: a question is not always a question. A rhetorical question does not need an answer, and it is asked for effect.
Exam tip
Exam tip. When you comment on sentence length, say whether the sentence is short or long, and what the length does to the pace or emphasis.
Exercise 2C Practice: sentence structure and effect
Method. Count the full stops, question marks and exclamation marks, then check.
- Find the sentences. Count the sentences in paragraph 3.5 sentences
- Check the count. Each sentence ends with one mark.5
- Write the answer. 5
Check. The count is 5. ✓
Method. Count the full stops, question marks and exclamation marks, then check.
- Find the sentences. Count the sentences in paragraph 2.4 sentences
- Check the count. Each sentence ends with one mark.4
- Write the answer. 4
Check. The count is 4. ✓
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. It ends with a question mark and is asked for effect.question fits
- Reject the other choices. A statement tells a fact, and a command gives an order.statement and command do not fit
- Write the answer. question
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Method. Look at the first word.
- Look at the first word. Pick is a verb given as an order.Pick
- Name the type. An order is a command.command
- Write the answer. command
Check. It is an order. ✓
Method. Name the choice, then say what it makes the reader feel or picture.
- Find the choice. The writer chooses these words.Who decided that this was acceptable?
- Explain the effect. A question with no answer makes the reader think for themselves.it makes the reader question the situation and feel responsible
- Write the answer. it makes the reader question the situation and feel responsible.
Check. The effect is linked to the words. ✓
Method. Name the choice, then say what it makes the reader feel or picture.
- Find the choice. The writer chooses these words.This is not a small problem.
- Explain the effect. A short, clear sentence stresses the point.it creates emphasis, so the problem seems serious
- Write the answer. it creates emphasis, so the problem seems serious.
Check. The effect is linked to the words. ✓
Method. Search the text for the words the question asks for.
- Find the place in the text. The first group in the list is the ducks.the ducks that choke on plastic
- Copy the words exactly. Copy them with no changes.the ducks that choke on plastic
- Write the answer. the ducks that choke on plastic
Check. The words are copied exactly from the text. ✓
Method. Name the choice, then say what it makes the reader feel or picture.
- Find the choice. The writer chooses these words.Think of the ducks that choke on plastic, the children who play near broken glass, and the grandparents who no longer sit on the benches
- Explain the effect. Three examples build up a sense of harm.it builds a picture of widespread harm, so the reader feels more concerned
- Write the answer. it builds a picture of widespread harm, so the reader feels more concerned.
Check. The effect is linked to the words. ✓
Method. Compare the lengths of the sentences.
- Find the sentences. Pick up one item today. has five words.five words
- Compare. The other sentences are longer.longer
- Write the answer. Pick up one item today.
Check. It is the shortest sentence. ✓
Method. Count the full stops, question marks and exclamation marks, then check.
- Find the sentences. Count the sentences in paragraph 4.3 sentences
- Check the count. Each sentence ends with one mark.3
- Write the answer. 3
Check. The count is 3. ✓
Method. Look at its ending.
- Look at its ending. It ends with a full stop and describes a situation.full stop
- Write the answer. statement
Check. It states a fact. ✓
Method. Look at the first word.
- Look at the first word. Ask is an order.ask
- Write the answer. command
Check. It is an order. ✓
Method. Compare the first sentence with the last.
- Look at the short sentences. Pick up one item today, then ask a neighbour, are short and direct.short and direct
- Look at the last sentence. Together, we can give our park back is hopeful and slower.hopeful
- Write the answer. the short commands make the pace brisk and direct, and the last sentence slows to a hopeful close.
Check. The change in pace is explained. ✓
Viewpoint, person and structure
Viewpoint is the position from which a text is told. First person uses I or we; third person uses he, she or they. A writer can also shape the structure, the order of ideas, so the reader moves from one feeling to the next.
Key ideas
- First person uses I or we; third person uses he, she or they.
- Third-person narration shows what a character does, but not always what they think.
- Structure is the order of the text, such as from busy to quiet, or from problem to solution.
Method. Find the pronouns that refer to the characters.
- Find the pronoun. The text uses she, as in She watched the empty street.she watched
- Check the pronoun. She is a third-person pronoun.she
- Name the viewpoint. The narrator is outside the character.third person
- Write the answer. third person
Check. She watched is third person. ✓
Method. Find the pronoun, then say who it includes.
- Find the pronoun. We pay our taxes, and together, we can give our park back.we
- Name the viewpoint. We is first-person plural, so it speaks for a group.first person plural
- Explain the effect. The reader is included, so the reader feels part of the solution.part of the solution
- Write the answer. first person plural, which includes the reader in the problem and the solution
Check. The viewpoint includes the reader. ✓
Method. Compare paragraph 1 with paragraph 3.
- Paragraph 1. The market is busy, with colour and movement.busy
- Paragraph 3. The crowd thins and the street is silent.silent
- Describe the change. The structure moves from busy to quiet.from busy to quiet
- Write the answer. from a busy market to a quiet, empty street
Check. The change from busy to quiet is shown. ✓
Watch out
Watch out: "I" and "we" are both first person, but "we" speaks for a group. Name the pronoun and the group it includes.
Exam tip
Exam tip. For structure, name the change, then say where it happens (which paragraph), then what it does for the reader.
Exercise 2D Practice: viewpoint and structure
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. The pronoun she refers to a character outside the narrator.third person fits
- Reject the other choices. First person would use I or we, and this sentence does not.first person do not fit
- Write the answer. third person
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. The pronoun we speaks for the writer and the reader.first person fits
- Reject the other choices. Third person would use he, she or they.third person do not fit
- Write the answer. first person
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Method. Find the pronoun that speaks for a group.
- Find the pronoun. We is the first-person pronoun.we
- Check the group. It includes the writer and the reader.we
- Write the answer. we
Check. we includes the reader. ✓
Method. Compare the beginning with the end.
- The beginning. The market is busy and full of colour.busy and full of colour
- The end. The street is empty and silent.empty and silent
- Write the answer. it moves from a busy, colourful market to a quiet, empty street.
Check. The change is described. ✓
Method. Think about what the last image does.
- Look at the last sentence. Silence crept back onto the cobbles.Silence crept back
- Explain the effect. It gives a quiet ending, after the noise.quiet ending
- Write the answer. to leave the reader with a calm, reflective feeling after the busy market.
Check. The ending creates a calm feeling. ✓
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. Paragraph 4 tells the reader to pick up one item and to act.paragraph 4 fits
- Reject the other choices. Paragraph 1 describes the problem, and paragraph 3 says how serious it is.paragraph 1 and paragraph 3 do not fit
- Write the answer. paragraph 4
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Method. Name the choice, then say what it makes the reader feel or picture.
- Find the choice. The writer chooses these words.Together, we can give our park back
- Explain the effect. The writer and reader share the job of cleaning the park.it includes the reader, so the reader feels part of the solution
- Write the answer. it includes the reader, so the reader feels part of the solution.
Check. The effect is linked to the words. ✓
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. The text shows the vendor's actions, such as lowering the awning, but not her thoughts.no fits
- Reject the other choices. Yes would need the text to give her thoughts directly, and it does not.yes do not fit
- Write the answer. no
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Method. Name each stage, in order.
- The problem. Paragraphs 1 and 2 describe the rubbish.the rubbish
- The seriousness. Paragraph 3 says it is shameful.shameful
- The solution. Paragraph 4 gives the action to take.the action to take
- Write the answer. it starts with the problem in paragraphs 1 and 2, stresses its seriousness, and ends with a solution.
Check. The three stages are in order. ✓
Method. Find the paragraph about the empty street.
- Find the paragraph. Paragraph 3 says the street is empty.paragraph 3
- Write the number. The number is 3.3
- Write the answer. 3
Check. The empty street is in paragraph 3. ✓
Method. Look at the first word of the text.
- Look at the first word. The first word of the text is The.The
- Write the answer. The
Check. The first word is The. ✓
Method. Look at the first word of the text.
- Look at the first word. The first word of text 2 is Every.Every
- Write the answer. Every
Check. The first word is Every. ✓
Method. Compare the pronouns in each text.
- Text 1. It uses third person, so it is more distant.third person
- Text 2. It uses we and asks the reader to act.we
- Write the answer. text 2 is more personal, because it uses we and speaks directly to the reader.
Check. The comparison is supported. ✓
Tone, and evaluating the effect of the writer's choices
Tone is the mood or attitude the writer creates, such as calm, urgent or playful. To evaluate a choice, give a judgement (how well it works), a reason (why it works) and, if you can, a limit (where it could be better).
Key ideas
- Tone is the mood or attitude the writer creates.
- Evaluate: judge how well a choice works, and give a reason.
- A good evaluation gives both a strength and a weakness, with evidence.
Method. Look at the words and the pace of the paragraph.
- Look at the words. Slowly, quietly, silence, one by one.quietly, one by one
- Look at the pace. Short, steady sentences slow the reader.steady
- Name the tone. The tone is calm and reflective.calm and reflective
- Write the answer. calm and reflective
Check. The tone matches the words and pace. ✓
Method. Look at the commands and the questions.
- Look at the commands. Pick up one item today.Pick up one item today
- Look at the questions. Who decided that this was acceptable?Who decided
- Name the tone. The tone is urgent and persuasive.urgent and persuasive
- Write the answer. urgent and persuasive
Check. The commands and questions create urgency. ✓
Method. Give a judgement, then a reason.
- Judgement. The word is effective.effective
- Reason. It makes the reader feel guilt, and so the reader wants to act.feel guilt
- Judgement with reason. Yes, because it makes the reader feel guilty about a problem they can fix.guilty about a problem
- Write the answer. yes, because it makes the reader feel guilty about a problem they can fix
Check. The judgement is supported by a reason. ✓
Watch out
Watch out: "it is good" is not an evaluation. Say why it works, and how it affects the reader.
Exam tip
Exam tip. Start an evaluation with your judgement, give a quotation as evidence, then a reason, and end with the effect.
Exercise 2E Practice: tone and evaluation
Method. Look at the words and the pace.
- Look at the words. Silence and quietly show calm.Silence
- Name the tone. The tone is calm.calm
- Write the answer. calm
Check. The tone is calm. ✓
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. The commands and the questions push the reader to act now.urgent fits
- Reject the other choices. Relaxed suggests no need to act, and gloomy suggests no hope, so both fail to fit.relaxed and gloomy do not fit
- Write the answer. urgent
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Method. Quote, then explain.
- Quote. Pick up one item today.Pick up one item today
- Explain. The command and the word today press the reader to act.press the reader to act
- Write the answer. "Pick up one item today", because the command and the word today push the reader to act now.
Check. The evidence is quoted and explained. ✓
Method. Give a judgement, then the reason.
- Judgement. The text is effective for this reader.effective
- Reason. The writer uses we and a call to action, which fits this reader.call to action
- Write the answer. yes, because it appeals to shared responsibility with we, so the reader feels part of the work.
Check. The judgement is supported. ✓
Method. Give a judgement, then a reason.
- Judgement. The word is effective.effective
- Reason. It makes readers feel guilty and responsible.guilty and responsible
- Write the answer. yes, because it makes the reader feel guilty and responsible for the problem.
Check. The judgement is supported. ✓
Method. Think about the feeling the word gives.
- Think about the feeling. Cheerful suggests happiness.happiness
- Name the word. It is a positive word.positive
- Write the answer. positive
Check. Cheerful is positive. ✓
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. Rubbish is a strong, negative word that creates disgust.rubbish fits
- Reject the other choices. Bins and paths are neutral nouns, so they do not stir strong feeling.bins and paths do not fit
- Write the answer. rubbish
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Method. Judge the list, then explain.
- Judgement. The list helps the argument.helps
- Reason. Three groups make the harm seem widespread.widespread
- Write the answer. yes, because the three groups make the harm feel widespread, so the reader is more concerned.
Check. The judgement is supported. ✓
Method. Think about what we does, then what it assumes.
- Strength. It includes the reader in the solution.includes the reader
- Weakness. It may assume the reader already agrees.assumes agreement
- Write the answer. strength: it includes the reader; weakness: it may assume the reader already agrees.
Check. The strength and weakness are both reasoned. ✓
Method. Name the choice, then say what it makes the reader feel or picture.
- Find the choice. The writer chooses these words.Silence crept back onto the cobbles
- Explain the effect. The slow verb and the silence create a calm, reflective end.a quiet, peaceful and slightly sad tone
- Write the answer. a quiet, peaceful and slightly sad tone.
Check. The effect is linked to the words. ✓
Method. Think about the movement.
- Think about the movement. Everyone moving at once suggests energy.energy
- Write the answer. energetic
Check. The tone is energetic. ✓
Method. Find the command that pushes the reader.
- Find the command. The most urgent command is pick up one item today.Pick up one item today
- Write the answer. Pick up one item today.
Check. The command is copied exactly. ✓
Method. Judge the ending, then give two reasons.
- Judgement. The final sentence works well.works well
- Reason one. Give our park back is a hopeful image.hopeful
- Reason two. Together shares the responsibility with the reader.shares the responsibility
- Write the answer. yes, because give our park back is hopeful, and together shares the responsibility.
Check. The judgement is supported by two reasons. ✓
Chapter summary
| Skill | Method |
|---|---|
| Connotation | The suggested meaning of a word, beyond its literal meaning; explain what it suggests and its effect. |
| Imagery | Simile (like or as), metaphor (one thing is another), personification (a human action for a thing); say what each makes the reader picture. |
| Sentence length and type | A short sentence creates emphasis; a list of three builds; a rhetorical question makes the reader think. |
| Viewpoint | First person (I, we) or third person (he, she, they); say whom the pronoun includes. |
| Structure | The order of ideas, such as busy to quiet, or problem to solution. |
| Tone and evaluation | Name the tone with evidence; judge how well a choice works, with a reason. |
Can you…?
- I can separate the literal meaning of a word from its connotation
- I can name a device and explain its effect on the reader
- I can explain the effect of sentence length and sentence type
- I can identify viewpoint and explain what it does
- I can evaluate a writer's choices and give a reasoned judgement
Key terms
- denotation
- the literal, dictionary meaning of a word
- connotation
- an idea or feeling a word suggests
- imagery
- language that creates a picture in the reader's mind
- rhetorical question
- a question asked for effect, which does not need an answer
- viewpoint
- the position from which a text is told, such as first or third person
- tone
- the mood or attitude the writer creates
- evaluate
- to judge how well something works, with reasons
Exercise 2Z Check-up
Method. Look at the words, then decide what kind of device they are.
- Find the device. The lanterns are compared to eyes, using like.like tired eyes closing
- Name it. The device is simile.simile
- Write the answer. simile
Check. The device is named correctly. ✓
Method. Separate the literal meaning from the suggested meaning.
- Literal meaning. shameful means the basic meaning of the word.shameful
- Suggested meaning. The word suggests guilt, which pushes the reader to act.disgraceful, something to feel guilty about
- Write the answer. disgraceful, something to feel guilty about.
Check. The suggestion is linked to the phrase. ✓
Method. Name the choice, then say what it makes the reader feel or picture.
- Find the choice. The writer chooses these words.lanterns swinging like small moons
- Explain the effect. The simile makes the lanterns seem magical.the lanterns look round, bright and magical
- Write the answer. the lanterns look round, bright and magical.
Check. The effect is linked to the words. ✓
Method. Count the full stops, question marks and exclamation marks, then check.
- Find the sentences. Count the sentences in paragraph 2.4 sentences
- Check the count. Each sentence ends with one mark.4
- Write the answer. 4
Check. The count is 4. ✓
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. It ends with a question mark and is asked for effect.question fits
- Reject the other choices. A statement and a command do not end with a question mark.statement and command do not fit
- Write the answer. question
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Method. Name the choice, then say what it makes the reader feel or picture.
- Find the choice. The writer chooses these words.This is not a small problem.
- Explain the effect. The short sentence stresses the point.it creates emphasis and seriousness
- Write the answer. it creates emphasis and seriousness.
Check. The effect is linked to the words. ✓
Method. Test each choice against the sentence or the text.
- Read what the question asks for. Decide what the sentence or the text needs.
- Test the choice. The pronoun we speaks for the writer and reader.first person fits
- Reject the other choices. Third person would use he, she or they.third person do not fit
- Write the answer. first person
Check. The choice fits the sentence or the text. ✓
Method. Compare the start and the end.
- The start. The market is busy.busy
- The end. The street is quiet.quiet
- Write the answer. from a busy market to a quiet, empty street.
Check. The structure is described. ✓
Method. Look at the commands and questions.
- Look at the commands. Pick up one item today is urgent.Pick up one item today
- Name the tone. The tone is urgent.urgent
- Write the answer. urgent
Check. The tone is urgent. ✓
Method. Give a judgement, then a reason.
- Judgement. The phrase is effective.effective
- Reason. Buried suggests the park is lost, which creates concern.lost
- Write the answer. yes, because buried suggests the park is almost lost, which makes the reader want to act.
Check. The judgement is supported. ✓
Total 17 marks. Allow about 17 minutes.
Exercise 2X Practice test questions
Method. Look for like or as, then check whether one thing is called another.
- Check for like or as. There is no like or as.no like or as
- Check the comparison. The phrase says a street is a river.a river of colour
- Write the answer. metaphor
Check. One thing is called another. ✓
Method. Look for a human action given to a thing.
- Find the action. Silence crept, a human movement.crept
- Name the device. Giving a non-human thing a human action is personification.personification
- Write the answer. personification
Check. Silence is given a human action. ✓
Method. Name the device, then explain the picture it creates.
- Name the device. Like small moons is a simile.simile
- Explain the effect. The lanterns look round, glowing and magical.round, glowing and magical
- Write the answer. A simile; it makes the lanterns look round, glowing and magical.
Check. The simile creates the picture. ✓
Method. Look at the ending and its purpose.
- Look at the ending. It ends with a question mark.question mark
- Check the purpose. The writer asks for effect, not an answer.for effect
- Write the answer. question
Check. It is a question. ✓
Method. Look at the length, then the effect.
- Look at the length. Only six words, after longer sentences.six words
- Explain the effect. It stresses the point, so the problem seems serious.stresses the point
- Write the answer. It creates emphasis, so the problem seems serious.
Check. The short sentence is emphatic. ✓
Method. Think about the connotation of buried.
- Find the word. Buried is the word.buried
- Name the suggestion. It suggests the park is hidden and lost.hidden and lost
- Write the answer. hidden and lost
Check. Buried suggests something lost. ✓
Method. Count the sentences.
- Count the full stops. There are three sentences, each with a full stop.3 full stops
- Write the number. The count is three.3
- Write the answer. 3
Check. Three sentences. ✓
Method. Look at the list, then the effect.
- Look at the list. Ducks, children and grandparents are three groups.three groups
- Explain the build. Each group adds to the sense of harm.adds to the harm
- Explain the effect. The reader pictures many people and animals affected.many people and animals
- Write the answer. The three groups build a picture of widespread harm, so the reader feels concerned.
Check. The list builds the harm. ✓
Method. Name the pronoun, then say who it includes.
- Find the pronoun. We is the pronoun.we
- Name the viewpoint. We is first person plural, so it speaks for a group.first person plural
- Explain the effect. The reader is included in the problem.included in the problem
- Write the answer. First person plural, which includes the reader in the problem.
Check. The viewpoint includes the reader. ✓
Method. Judge the sentence, then give two reasons.
- Judgement. It is a good way to end.good
- Reason one. It is a direct command, so it pushes the reader.direct command
- Reason two. One small action feels possible today.possible today
- Write the answer. Yes, because it is a direct command, and it asks for one small action that the reader can do today.
Check. The judgement is supported by two reasons. ✓